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The Cat Who Hated Water  - Haiku With Illustration by SrTw


ふ るいけや
猫 は 飛 び込む
猫ノオト

(Furuike ya
Neko wa tobikomu
Neko no oto)

(An ancient pond.
A cat jumps in.
The sound of cat)
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The Cat Who Hated Water - Haiku by *SrTw

Syllables: (ok for less formal, "western" haiku)
Line 1: 5
Line 2: 7
Line 3: 5

Mora / Moras: (necessary for pure, traditional haiku)
Line 1: 5
Line 2: 7
Line 3: 5

Haiku: by SrTw 2008. Fun version about a cat - assumption that cats hate water!!!
(Inspired by Haiku "Furuike ya..." by Matsuo Bashou)
[A rough translation of the original:
"An ancient/old pond
(A) frog jumps in.
The sound of water"]
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DarkGoth100 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like the drawing of the cat.
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SrTw Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014   General Artist
Thanks! ^.^
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DarkGoth100 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're very welcome.
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AzusaNanako Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool!
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SrTw Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013   General Artist
Thank you very much!!! v(^‿^)v
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chaosqueen122 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:XD: cats and water just don't fit together um well maybe a turkish van...
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SrTw Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012   General Artist
Yes definitely! They really love water and I have just read that they enjoy swimming! I think I might try a haiku variation about one! XD
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chaosqueen122 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D hahah awesome
yeah they have quite a thing for water.
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SrTw Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012   General Artist
It's very interesting thanks! :D
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chaosqueen122 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are very welcome :)
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SrTw Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   General Artist
≡^ω^≡
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xXArtimisXx Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Haha this is kawaii!
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SrTw Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012   General Artist
Thanks so much! I've just added wa after neko to make it 5-7-5 and wa fits in well there with the stress as well as the sense, I think. What do you think? Should I put chan (or even san!) instead of wa? a haiku doesn't need wa, ne?
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xXArtimisXx Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Eh... I'm not sure, friend. I haven't learned a lot of Japanese yet... ^^;
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SrTw Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012   General Artist
Ah OK but something tells me you will do well in it! ◕.‿.◕
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xXArtimisXx Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Student General Artist
If I can stop procrastinating, then yeah! But, for now, procrastination is one of my good- ah I mean bad! Very bad skills. ^^;
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SrTw Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012   General Artist
Don't knock it too much though!!! Strategic and tactical procrastination is a valuable part of the skills portfolio for decision making, project planning, potential problem management and successful outcomes as well as for outwitting and wrong-footing the enemy or competitor. :D
<3
WOW (="Words Of Wisdom")
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xXArtimisXx Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Student General Artist
That makes me feel better about it, thanks! ^-^
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SrTw Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012   General Artist
Good, that's cool! It's just knowing when it's good or bad to do it. Most people who do it are probably not in full control of it, so it isn't good except when they are lucky! ҉‿҉
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